nice style, small descrepancies
it was kind of weird that you (seemingly) could not die. there was also a point at which i walked through a monster, then when continuing along this path i was attacked by a.. shadow monster? i'm not sure what really happened, but it came and went very fast and did not happen again.
in addition. it could do without the sarcastic female, she kind of ruined the aura a bit.. and i don't want to ruin the plot for anyone that reads this, but the monsters seemed a little "forgiving".
also you had a typo in a line near the end.. you wrote "out" instead of "ours".. no biggie though
however, i don't want to put down your work.. it was nicely put together and it scared the pants off me once or twice
play alone in the dark for maximized experience!